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Bizroots

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Hello Webmaster,

I have a website on colon cleanse (health product). It is ranking on google first page with major keywords but i am neither getting clicks nor sale weather i get more then 200 visits everyday. I want to provide you my website's url
coloncleansebenefit.com. What should i use something for the landing page that can convert.
Plz give suggestion, what should change in the page that i can get sufficient clicks on offers.

Thanks
 


I'll cut you a break here and write a sensible answer...

Pretty much everything is wrong with your page...the headline is terrible, the copy is terrible, you are trying to combine colon and acai offers on one page, over use of bolding on colon terms is blatently trying to game the serps... I could go on and on.

I'm not even going to try to critique your copy... it's just wrong... all of it.

In most cases I would recommend that you do some studying on copywriting (I always recommend John Carleton's stuff) but it's obviouse that English isn't your native tongue and your grasp of the basics is too weak.

You would need to do some seriouse work on your conversational English before you even consider tying to learn any effective copywriting.

You are now learning, like many others before you, that page 1 rankings with no conversions aren't worth the effort, and untill your grasp of English increases massively you will not get those conversions.

Your options are:
A) hire a pro copywriter (not cheap)
B) partner with somebody who can copywrite and speak English well
C) spend a couple of years learning English
D) sell the site to somebody who can make a success of it

Your link building appears to consists exclusivly on link dumping on blog comments, so I wouldn't expect your rankings to last very long either. If you would like a serious offer on the domain, drop me a PM.
 
It won't cost that much to get some decent copy. Speak to BlueYonder or InternetAuthor and they'll sort you out.
 
"Colon Cleansing is the New Arena of Human Well Being"

How this isnt converting is beyond me...
 
ill pay you $40.50 for it

or, even better.. I'll pay you $5 a week to run a 728x90 banner on top, my paypal is open windowed open window or whatever
 
Very simple quit trying to sell the page. Give something to get traffic to your site. When they see the info they feel more comfortable about you. Build an circle of influence around this page. Need more information skypeme: physical2006
 
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