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wickedteasa

wickedteasa

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I have intentionally set up my Twitter account to be a potpourri of updates, mixing up current affairs with a small % of marketing messages. I did this because in the beginning I didn't really know how to use Twitter, and I didn't want to get blacklisted by other followers as a blatant spammer.

However, now that I've set up a couple of landing pages, I want to write some killer catch phrases (I'm not real good at those) for a couple of campaigns using Twitter as my marketing tool of choice.

Here is where I need your supreme knowledge oh mighty wickedfire universe...

Here is a page: Acai Berry

First of all, rip it apart, give me the good with the bad...I'm thick skinned, I have 5 crazy brothers, so do your thing.

Second, how can I make it better? You see, this domain name I bought from blogger was/is my first attempt at making a landing page. I am going to spend more this week with a Wordpress host, but before I exhaust cash, I want to get it right. Blogger, for now is my playground.

And since, you all here in WF are uber kewl, cash driven, and downright crazy (my kind of folks) I actually value your direction. (I know, my therapist says I need to work on the folks I allow in my life)

Give it to me straight so I can get better...I want maximum exposure, and more money.:evil_laughter:

Thanks...
 


No one besides a semi-retarded human being typing random characters on their computer would ever buy something off that landing page. Now you know where you're at, here's what we can do about it..

Check what your competitors are doing, pick their LP's piece by piece and build your own variation of what you thought were the best aspects of those you looked at.

Fix your typo's, aka misspelling "Acai" in your title - did you even proof read this before you asked for advice?

Why would you even include a link to COPEAC on your left menu? You want to make money or teach other people how to?

...man, looking at it after saying what I said, it would take too much time to list all the things that are wrong with it. Is this a joke or something?
 
Okay

Awright...now I am researching and reading...I will be back...with a better landing page...it will be a 360 degree turnaround...

and you will all say, hey is that the same slug that created that first piece of crap?:glowingeyes_sml:
 
I'm working with the Acai niche right now as well. It's a pretty saturated market, so you're gonna have to put some more work into your LP (as everyone else has been saying).

First of all, work on the design of the site. You want to make it way more aesthetically pleasing. A good design/layout will help a lot.

And of course, work on your copywriting a little bit. Just read some other ads and see what everyone else is doing.
 
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