My first landing page, thoughts?

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Lose the bit that says you took your mothers advice and started green tea. Make it more like your friend told you about this amazing new tea that they lost loads of weight by drinking. No one really gets excited following their mothers advice.
 


get rid of all those nav links at the top that take you anywhere but the offer page - same goes with all the links/posts/etc at the bottom of the page - and the "posts" links on the side bar...replace that with another call to action/text based link to the offer...do you WANT visitors to go somewhere else besides your offer?

Widen the entire overall content area and bump the font size up 1
 
This is too funny. How many people here are just ordering this guy to make all these changes, so once it becomes perfect, its in everyone's portfolio?

This is the price you pay for sharing your LP, bozo. It aint yours no more. Better start something new.
 
make it better.. let us know when its profitable for you.. then post it up so we can steal it..
 
The before pic should be the one that he is shirtless in (show off them rolls), and the after should have him dressed like a nice college boy, because he does kinda look like a meth head.

Also, as mentioned before - make your links blue. Most people that are stupid enough to sign up for a rebill are too stupid to know that links can be any other color...
 
LP design by committee is really not a good idea... especially not here. Your content is as good as gone.

You'll do a lot better keeping your shit on the dl and do your own multivariate testing... your visitors will tell you what works best.
 
There's some great feedback here and I just wanted to summarize the points I came across. Feel free to contribute any tips you have to share.

- Eliminate all other ads except for the affiliate ads
- Product reviews should sound informal
- Emphasize product benefits and show affiliate link above the fold
- Associate affiliate link to call to action
- Make affiliate links blue, it's what people look for
- Make copy sound enthusiastic
- Call to actions should be big and visible
- Reduce or eliminate other links that take you anywhere but to the offer page

I know I'm outing my own LP but here's the way I see it. This is my first LP and a rather shitty one. I have a lot to learn, why not get some insight from others who have already gone down this path. Thanks for the feedback guys, especially those honest ones.
 
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