Need a Landing Page review
- Thread starter Faint
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Stress the word free. "How I got White Teeth with just (FREE) two products!".
Edit: Cause I'm guessing these are free trials.
Edit: Cause I'm guessing these are free trials.
You have to pay shipping and handling. I put free in then later suggested that "Amy" paid shipping and handling. I don't want to put free in too much cause then the person would be like "What the fuck, i'm not paying."
Where? I must be blind.
Edit: http://img26.imageshack.us/img26/2016/117049260132833.jpg - Look good to me, but then again, I have seen some fucked up teeth.
Dude! Dude! Dude!
The text is not good. Sorry but its truth, try to use some different variation of text.
The text is not good. Sorry but its truth, try to use some different variation of text.
Can you be more specific what is wrong with it? Or is it just shit in general?
My opinion:
- Images are photoshopped and weak
- The gray buttons should be a bit more 'flamboyant' if you ask me. I hardly noticed them.
- Images are photoshopped and weak
- The gray buttons should be a bit more 'flamboyant' if you ask me. I hardly noticed them.
The 3rd tooth on her right sticks out quite a bit. The teeth in the close-up are all perfectly aligned.
I don't know much about AM, but I've worked in Photoshop for years so...
Her teeth in the picture on the right are waaay, way too white. It looks very artificial and it just screams too much Photoshop. I suggest you tone down that white a bit, so that it looks more natural, while still impressive.
The 'before' picture isn't so good either (though less obvious): the orange lips are weird, and the yellow of the teeth doesn't look natural. Notice the shadows on the lower teeth where the yellow is very dark? That's a problem, because it gives it away (colorized picture).
Her teeth in the picture on the right are waaay, way too white. It looks very artificial and it just screams too much Photoshop. I suggest you tone down that white a bit, so that it looks more natural, while still impressive.
The 'before' picture isn't so good either (though less obvious): the orange lips are weird, and the yellow of the teeth doesn't look natural. Notice the shadows on the lower teeth where the yellow is very dark? That's a problem, because it gives it away (colorized picture).
yes the before after pics dont fit to each other. and you should add the 2
product links also to the right side
product links also to the right side
Other than what others have already said about the pictures, I would say work on your content a little bit. I see some typos and overall poor sentence structure...though that's probably not too important for a flog, I guess. At least it's readable.
Also the comments should have pictures for the users like somebody else said, and space out the dates of the posts. There's one where a commenter "thanks" Amy for the recommendation and has already received the product yet Amy had just posted about it the day before. Oh, and over-use of the word "products" in every single comment seems unnatural.
Also the comments should have pictures for the users like somebody else said, and space out the dates of the posts. There's one where a commenter "thanks" Amy for the recommendation and has already received the product yet Amy had just posted about it the day before. Oh, and over-use of the word "products" in every single comment seems unnatural.
