Would anyone be willing to look at and give constructive critism of a landing site?

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I'm just getting started and was wondering if a few people could review this site ringtones.newageads.com

I just realized there are a few things wrong with the phone image that I need to correct (as well as I found a little bug with the site with IE 6) but please take a look and give some ideas!

Thank you everyone for your time!
 


The phone while Gimmicky doesn't work it took me a minute to realise what it was meant for, and remember I was going there to look your visitors won't be so patient.

Most of the text is crap and waste of space and like MyOwnDemon I didn't get an immediate impression of what you were about or what I was being sold, offered etc.
reduce the long speel or at least reorganise so its not so prominent and make the top real estate useful.
 
Thank you everyone that gave constructive critism.
Anyone who was rude, thanks too.

Looks like I need to do more research.
 
I think it's really neat - very original - to me anyways. I just have a couple of suggestions. I don't care for the dark background but if you're going to continue to use it the white text should be made larger and more prominent so that it's actually legible. But a lighter background would make the phone pop out more. I also prefer to know where I'm going before clicking the keypad. So I would move the directory that's currently below the phone up alongside the phone and say something like - dial 1 for PlayPhone - Join Now to Get 10 BONUS DOWNLOADS!!! etc. Spiff up the phone display image, make it rotate or something to liven up your page. And if you're going to keep the content, move all of that underneath the phone section, people probably won't even scroll down there because they'll be too busy clicking on the phone. :)
 
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It takes forever to pull up the page on my slow connection. When I access it, I am confronted with a white on black page that is excessively aligned to the right. All the ads are at the bottom. Above the fold, it looks lame. Just my opinion. (and I am being constructive)
 
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